N:L to narrate
R:T to include setting
EARTH - 304
Chaos has erupted in manhattan villains are everywhere. There are only two people left in the industrial district. Captain naive and superdog. The police have blocked off all entries to the industrial district with concrete borders. super teddy heard a baby crying Captain naive destroyed the middle of the brooklyn bridge with his lazer beam. There's one car with a baby stuck inside of it there's another with an ambulance which one does an superdog save. He used his time powers to pause time like the flash and got both of the civilian's vehicles at a extremely slow speed. Then He had to take down Captain naive so he flew around Manhattan looking for captain naive he eventually found him in a cafe so he ripped him out of the cafe and dared captain naive to fight him and they duked it out and superdog came out victorious because he used his ice beam to freeze captain naive and loaded him into a police truck. To take him to prision until next time.
Kia ora Phoenix,
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like an awesome piece of writing so far, however I think it is a little short and I know you are creative enough to write a longer narrative.
Some suggestions to make it longer:
- What kind of chaos erupted in Manhattan? Describe what can be seen.
- Why have police blocked off entries to the industrial district? Describe what happened.
- Why did Captain Naive destroy the middle of Brooklyn bridge? What was his motive? How did he do it?
- Describe the fight between Captain Naive and Superdog. What happened? How did Superdog win? Was there every a point Superdog was losing? How did he end up victorious?